Hey NBC, try submerging your editors in an editing class!

nbcnewscomThe story: Local official is 6th arrest in Georgia baby’s shooting (nbcnews.com 3/29/13)

 

The mistake: “A handgun was discovered about two miles away from the crime scene, submerged a marsh, the Brunswick police spokesman said yesterday.”

The Copy Vigilante says: It’s really depressing when a major news organization doesn’t catch a word missing from a sentence. Granted it’s a small word, ‘in’, but still, pretty pathetic. And if we take this mangled sentence by itself we can have fun! If a marsh submerges itself, isn’t that redundant? And if something is trying to submerge a marsh it’s going to take a hell of a lot of water!

What’s in a name nbcnews.com? Everything!

The story: Former Manson follower recommended for parole after 40 years (nbcnews.com 10-4-12)

The mistake: “Former Charles Manson associate Bruce Davis…”

“…recommendation that David be released.”

The Copy Vigilante says: Why should we believe anything in this article when nbcnews.com can’t even get the person’s name right? The first four times he’s mentioned his last name is “Davis”. But in the second-to-last paragraph he becomes “David”.  One of the first things my editor told me years ago at a major daily newspaper was this: “Make sure you always get the person’s name right!”